Wednesday, January 13, 2010

The Boring Story - By WonJoon - Edited by Raymond -

After piles of work, I had finally reached winter break. It is also my first day of hagwon. My eyes opened suddenly this morning. I washed my filthy body, and consumed enormous amount of nutrition. After I stuffed my bag, I ran out to catch a bus. I waited and waited; however, the bus didnt come. I got my phone and contacted my friend, and he told me that there was no hagwon bus today since it was Saturday. So I went to the bus stop, and waited for the city bus to come. Again, I waited and waited but the bus didnt come. I became desperate. To relieve myself, I went to a convenient store to get a sushi. As soon as I was about to buy the sushi, the bus passed by. I became frustrated. I ran back to the bus stop and waited once more. The bus finally came and I longed for hagwon. Finally, I hopped off on the city hall. I strutted toward my hagwon. I took an elevator and swooshed up. As I entered the classroom, I said hi to my friends. Then we played for five minutes and started taking a test. We took the horrible test for four hours. After we finished, we ate lunch together. And finally, we fled to PC bang and had so much fun.

3 comments:

  1. fantastic! I think the original structure of this story is very well made. Some of the imagery was greatly exaggerated but it was good in overall

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  2. I could see you have included many exaggerating vocabulary into the original copy, and it works well.

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  3. I like your adjectives because they create images in my head. The Story sounds very realistic. ^^

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